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In This Land by ~The-Greenie-Fire:iconThe-Greenie-Fire:

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In This Land

    I used to dream of a far removed land
    Whose faces were ever-changing
    As the roiling, shifting sands of the Arabian Desert
    While it whips about, stinging my senses with a crude lack of care.

    And I used to wish for this land
    This land which remains as nameless to me now
    As it did in my naive eyes so long ago
    When the clattering tattoo of horses' hooves would assault my ears
    And the lightly salted sea breeze would caress me gently
    And the crushing fear of the bloodthirsty dragon crippled me
    All in the same night.

    The land held many wonders to be sought
    By heroes and dastardly villains alike
    Who as you know often enjoy neighbouring lairs
    So as to plot their dramatic novels together quite easily
    And pull them off without a hitch.

    In this land can be found
    A good many seas
    Near which I may often be found
    Exploring dream-caves
    Where the briny air leaves a heavy feeling in my chest.

    And the greenest meadows line this land's valleys
    Where the grass looks to be and endless sea and feels like it too
    Until you meet the towering mountains
    Whose heights are impossible to gauge.

    But of course I've been to the roof of this land
    And felt the bittersweet sun's rays
    Like the sweetest candy and the darkest chocolate
    Through little to no atmosphere
    And munched on the tasteless
    Yet cotton-candy clouds.

    And I've been through this land's dankest castle dungeon
    Or through its most luxurious ball room
    As the guest of honour
    Of course.

    And this land's rulers I've seen
    The good kings of friendlier countries
    And the wicked warlords of cold foreign climes
    And the beautiful princesses
    And handsome princes
    All of whom spark an intense heart-clenching feeling of adventure.

    And I've believed in this land
    As well all often do when we are young
    And I've woken up disappointed
    Many a night
    When I could no longer sense the smooth leather
    Of a sword's handle beneath my palm
    Nor feel the wind beneath me as I ride my flying carpet
    Through midnight skies
    Nor taste the metallic blood
    Or smell the sweet fresh air the thought of which makes my head light
    And which puts the cities and factories when I wake
    To deep deep shame.

    And I miss the land
    Where a peasant can become a king
    A woman a sword bearing hero
    A knight can become a humble farmer
    And where I can dream my wildest dreams
    And have them come true
    Before my astounded eyes
    In the sweltering sandy dunes
    The freezing arctic cold
    And the comfortable spring breeze.

    But I awake every morning
    With no land of fantasy or heroes or dragons to see
    For miles around.

    And I used to dream of this far removed land and I used to wish for its wonders.
©2009-2010 ~The-Greenie-Fire
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Author's Comments

Written for an English assignment. It was only supposed to be around 50 words, but stretched to 479. Or so. Does it even count as a freestyle poem anymore? Yeah, I think so. Not prose?

Eh, like I said. It was a class assignment. I don't particularly like it (I don't dislike it, but I'm not ecstatic), but I thought I'd share.

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=Incarnadine91 Nov 11, 2009, 8:25:18 AM
I do love the subject, and I sympathise =) Sometimes I just never wanna wake up!

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~The-Greenie-Fire Nov 11, 2009, 5:00:45 PM
Thankyou so much =] I know, it seems we all feel that way sometimes ;p

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"Hah, I can fly an you can't!
A natural airman, incase you hadn't noticed!
And in conclusion, I'd like to add that
I'm a girl and you can all get stuffed!"
-Deryn 'Dylan' Sharp, Leviathan, Scott Westerfeld
#Leviathaneers

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=Incarnadine91 Nov 11, 2009, 11:30:03 PM
No problem ;) But then again, I daydream a lot when I'm awake anyway...

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~02dellerj Oct 28, 2009, 2:33:45 PM
really lovely :)

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~The-Greenie-Fire Oct 28, 2009, 3:36:40 PM
Heehee, thanks so much ;p

--
"Hah, I can fly an you can't!
A natural airman, incase you hadn't noticed!
And in conclusion, I'd like to add that
I'm a girl and you can all get stuffed!"
-Deryn 'Dylan' Sharp, Leviathan, Scott Westerfeld
#Leviathaneers

Gyver *Poison-Night-Pack
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~Lady-Lillian Oct 25, 2009, 10:47:22 AM
I like this. Very creative and beautifully written. :) Great work!!

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"Why is the world covered in two-thirds of water?"
"I don't know."
"Why it is covered in water?"
"Shut up."
"I wonder how water was created?"
"Now, I have to use the washroom."
"Works everytime."

*quote taken out of my novel in progress*
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~The-Greenie-Fire Oct 25, 2009, 11:00:23 AM
Thanks! =]

--
"Hah, I can fly an you can't!
A natural airman, incase you hadn't noticed!
And in conclusion, I'd like to add that
I'm a girl and you can all get stuffed!"
-Deryn 'Dylan' Sharp, Leviathan, Scott Westerfeld
#Leviathaneers

Gyver *Poison-Night-Pack
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~Lady-Selia Oct 23, 2009, 11:47:52 AM
Love it Greenie :) beautiful style and very vivid imagery, if you don't get a 100 I'll be sending your english teacher quite a rant! XD

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Another misspelled rhyme written in the book of time...
:iconthe-greenie-fire:
~The-Greenie-Fire Oct 23, 2009, 12:02:04 PM
Aw, thanks so much! You flatter me xD

Haha, alright I'll keep that in mind!

Thanks for the fave as well!

--
"Hah, I can fly an you can't!
A natural airman, incase you hadn't noticed!
And in conclusion, I'd like to add that
I'm a girl and you can all get stuffed!"
-Deryn 'Dylan' Sharp, Leviathan, Scott Westerfeld
#Leviathaneers

Gyver *Poison-Night-Pack
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*InLovingMemoryOfYou Oct 22, 2009, 10:14:45 PM
I always love your poems and this one is no exception!

You always have a lovely rhythm (sp?) to them and the subject is brilliant.

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I believe in nothing but the truth in who we are
I believe in nothing but the beating of our hearts

-100 Suns, 30 Seconds To Mars
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